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5．•假如你是李華曾經(jīng)是一名失學(xué)兒童，你有幸得到在中國(guó)工作的Mr Brown的資助，可以重返校園．你給Mr．Brown寫(xiě)了一封信，內(nèi)容如下：
★收到錢(qián)和書(shū)后能重返校園，非常感激；
★在老師的幫助下，學(xué)習(xí)有了很大的進(jìn)步，受到老師的表?yè)P(yáng)和鼓勵(lì)；
★決心更加努力學(xué)習(xí)，取得更大的進(jìn)步；
★盼望見(jiàn)到Mr．Brown，希望他寄來(lái)一張照片．
注意：書(shū)信應(yīng)包括以上所有要點(diǎn)，可適當(dāng)增加細(xì)節(jié)，以使行文連貫
Dear Mr．Brown．
I am writing to express my deepest thanks for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．（高分句型一）Thank you so much．
I have been working hard since I went back to school．I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers．They often praise me and encourage me．But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）
How are you getting on with your life and work？I would like to meet you in person，but I have no opportunity to do so．Would you please send me a photo of yourself？
Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
Yours Sincerely，
Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)屬于提綱類(lèi)作文，根據(jù)提示信息假如你是李華曾經(jīng)是一名失學(xué)兒童，你有幸得到在中國(guó)工作的Mr Brown的資助，可以重返校園．你給Mr．Brown寫(xiě)了一封信，內(nèi)容如下，寫(xiě)作時(shí)注意以下幾點(diǎn)：1、仔細(xì)閱讀有關(guān)提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點(diǎn)包括：★收到錢(qián)和書(shū)后能重返校園，非常感激；★在老師的幫助下，學(xué)習(xí)有了很大的進(jìn)步，受到老師的表?yè)P(yáng)和鼓勵(lì)；★決心更加努力學(xué)習(xí)，取得更大的進(jìn)步；★盼望見(jiàn)到Mr．Brown，希望他寄來(lái)一張照片．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進(jìn)行分析、構(gòu)思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語(yǔ)，按照一定邏輯關(guān)系來(lái)寫(xiě)．本文寫(xiě)作時(shí)可以按照要點(diǎn)所給的順序?qū)懀?、根據(jù)要表達(dá)的內(nèi)容確定句子的時(shí)態(tài)、語(yǔ)態(tài)．4．注意使用高級(jí)詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點(diǎn)．
【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】本文結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達(dá)：make great progress取得巨大進(jìn)步；But for若不是；make up  mind to do下定決心去做某事；get on with與…相處；進(jìn)展；in person親自；
I could not have returned to school without your help．（高分句型一）
But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）
I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）

解答 Dear Mr．Brown，
       I am writing to express my deepest thanks for the money and books you sent me．I could not have returned to school without your help．（高分句型一）Thank you so much．
       I have been working hard since I went back to school．I have made great progress in my studies with the help of my teachers．They often praise me and encourage me．But for your help，I might have left school and couldn't have got such a good education．（高分句型二）I have made up my mind to study harder and make greater progress．（高分句型三）
       How are you getting on with your life and work？I would like to meet you in person，but I have no opportunity to do so．Would you please send me a photo of yourself？
       Thank you again for your generous help and best wishes!
                                                                                               Yours Sincerely，
                                                                                                LiHua

點(diǎn)評(píng) 英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作是一項(xiàng)主觀性較強(qiáng)的測(cè)試題．它不僅考查學(xué)生的寫(xiě)作基礎(chǔ)而且還考查學(xué)生在寫(xiě)作過(guò)程中綜合運(yùn)用語(yǔ)言的能力．在撰寫(xiě)時(shí)要注意主謂語(yǔ)一致，時(shí)態(tài)呼應(yīng)，用詞貼切等．要提高英語(yǔ)寫(xiě)作水平，需要兩方面的訓(xùn)練：一是語(yǔ)言基礎(chǔ)方面的訓(xùn)練，要有扎實(shí)的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識(shí)造出正確無(wú)誤的句子；二是寫(xiě)作知識(shí)和能力 方面的訓(xùn)練以掌握寫(xiě)作方面的基本方法和技巧．