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16．你們班準備舉辦一個主題為"My Favorite Sports Star"的班會，請你根據以下表格信息，寫一篇英語短文，簡要介紹羽毛球選手林丹，并向全班作演講．
注意：1．詞數120左右；
2．可以適當添加細節，以使行文連貫；
3．開頭與結尾已寫好，不計入總詞數．

姓名	林丹，綽號"超級丹"
籍貫	中國福建龍巖
出生日期	1983.10.14
身高	1.7m
體重	72kg
職業生涯	5歲開始打羽毛球；12歲參軍；18歲進入國家隊；獲得多項國際大賽冠軍，包括北京奧運會和倫敦奧運會兩枚金牌
比賽風格	左手握拍，以扣球著稱；獲勝后常常敬禮或將衣服扔向觀眾以示慶祝

參考詞匯：羽毛球 badminton； 綽號 nickname； 冠軍 champion； 敬禮 salute； 扣球 smash
Good afternoon，everyone!
My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，Fujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）His professional career began six years later when he was admitted into the national team．He is 1.78 m tall and weighs 72kg．He is famous for hissmash as well as his left-handed playing style．So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）After winning a game，he often salutes audiences of all sides or throws his sportswear to the crowds to celebrate his victory．
Thank you for listening．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于圖表類作文，根據提示信息你們班準備舉辦一個主題為"My Favorite Sports Star"的班會，請你根據以下表格信息，寫一篇英語短文，簡要介紹羽毛球選手林丹，并向全班作演講   寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息  2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在圖表的范圍內進行分析、構思和想象．要依據提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據要表達的內容確定句子的時態、語態．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：at the age of在…歲的時候；be admitted into被錄取；is famous for因為…而出名；including包括；a variety of 各種各樣；
My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
  Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，Fujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）
So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）

解答 Good afternoon，everyone!
        My favorite sports star is Lin Dan，whose nickname is Super Dan，a world-famous badminton player．（高分句型一）
        Born on Oct.14th，1983，in Longyan，Fujian Province，China，Lin Dan started playing badminton at the age of five and joined the army when he was twelve．（高分句型二）His professional career began six years later when he was admitted into the national team．He is 1.78 m tall and weighs 72kg．He is famous for his smash as well as his left-handed playing style．So far，he has received lots of champions and honors in a variety of international competitions，including the two Olympic gold medals from Beijing and London．（高分句型三）After winning a game，he often salutes audiences of all sides or throws his sportswear to the crowds to celebrate his victory．
         Thank you for listening．

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．