Question

假設你是高山，你的外教Mr.Smith相組織幾名學生去一個學校進行一次助學和聯誼活動。請參看以下信息，以書信的形式向Mr.Smith提出申請，說明你打算如何開展這次活動并陳述理由。

能力	計劃
善于交流	相處融洽
愛好，例如…	組織活動
英語口語好	幫助學習英語，如…

注意：
1. 表達中必須包括所給要點， 適當發揮，不要簡單翻譯。
2. 詞數90左右。開頭已經寫好，不計入總詞數。
3. 表達中請勿提及真實校名及姓名。
Dear Mr.Smith
I’m so excited to know that our school is organizing an activity to help the kids in a school. I hope I __________________________________________________________
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I’ll be thankful if you give ne the chance!
Yours
Gao Shan   

Answer 1

Dear Mr.Smith
I’m so excited to know that our school is organizing an activity to help the kids in a school. I hope I can join in it. I think I have the abilities to help them. First I’ll get on well with the kids there.. I can do it because I always communicate well with others. And I have a few hobbies, such as playing basketball, ping-pong and singing songs. So I’m going to help organize after-class activities. Also, I speak good English. I can help the kids with their English. I’ll read English loud with them and teach them English songs. It’s really fun.
I’ll be thankful if you give ne the chance!
Yours
Gao Shan

試題分析：這是一篇表格作文。本文要求按照題目要求并結合表格中的內容完成這篇申請報告，我們要用恰當的語言把所列舉的內容準確地表達出來。寫作中要包含你的能力和組織這次活動的計劃等幾個方面進行陳述，表達出個人的觀點等。根據材料內容可知本文主要是一般現在時態，人稱主要是第一人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關系。
【亮點說明】這篇短文簡明、扼要地闡明了自己的申請目的和要求及自己具備的能力和組織活動的計劃等，并包含了文中所要求的基本信息，并展開了合理的聯想。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，包含狀語從句和賓語從句的準確使用為文章增色不少.如 I’m so excited to know that our school is organizing an activity to help the kids in a school.，I can do it because I always communicate well with others.，get on well with the kids，help the kids with their English學習中再注意總結，牢記一些固定句式及短語，寫作時就可以適當引用，使文章的表達更有邏輯性，更富有條理。