Question

書(shū)面表達(dá)（15分）

人的一生應(yīng)以自信、自強(qiáng)、自立為重，請(qǐng)以“Believe yourself, and you will win！”為題，寫(xiě)一篇自己在學(xué)習(xí)或生活中遇到困難并戰(zhàn)勝困難的文章。

要求：1.切合題意，內(nèi)容完整；

2.表達(dá)清楚，書(shū)寫(xiě)規(guī)范；

3.詞數(shù)不少于80個(gè)。

（提示：1.你遇到了什么困難？2.你是如何克服困難的？3.你從中體會(huì)到什么？）

 

 

 

 

Answer 1

Believe myself, and I will win

As an old saying goes, where there is a will, there is a way. There always are difficulties in our life and we have to face them.

In fact, when I was a child, I always feel sad or nervous about the difficulties in my life .Then my parents told me that where there is a will, there is a way, they also told me that I should be confident.

Now, I'm no longer a child and I begin to know the real meaning of my parents’ words. To be confident means I should believe myself. If I do that, I will become a happy and brave person.

Believe myself, there are hopes in my life. In the future, I won't be afraid of the difficulties in my life and I'm sure that nothing can beat me and I will win!

Believe myself, and a beautiful future is waiting for me.

【解析】

試題分析：這篇作文要求我們以Believe myself, and I will win為題目寫(xiě)一篇作文，在作文中記敘自己在學(xué)習(xí)或生活中遇到的困難，以及最終戰(zhàn)勝困難的短文。這篇作文的中心有兩個(gè)，一是記敘自己的一次戰(zhàn)勝困難的經(jīng)歷，這個(gè)經(jīng)歷讓自己有了自信。所以在選材的時(shí)候要注意符合作文的主題；另一個(gè)中心是只要相信自己，就能勝利。題目中并沒(méi)有給我們規(guī)定具體寫(xiě)什么，這是設(shè)了一個(gè)主題，所以具體的內(nèi)容還是需要我們自己發(fā)揮的。通過(guò)分析可知，這篇作文我們應(yīng)主要使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)和一般過(guò)去時(shí)，第一人稱(chēng)。寫(xiě)作時(shí)，要注意不同時(shí)態(tài)的轉(zhuǎn)換和動(dòng)詞的正確形式。另外還需要注意句式的變化，詞匯和高級(jí)句型的使用，以使文章表達(dá)流暢。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】這是一篇比較不錯(cuò)的作文，作者通過(guò)舉例，告訴我們，我們只有相信自己，在生活中才能取得成功。首先作者使用了一句諺語(yǔ)Where there is a will, there is a way 來(lái)開(kāi)始自己的作文。這句“有志者，事竟成”是一個(gè)名言，放在這里也比較合適，點(diǎn)明了文章的主題。第二段中作者描寫(xiě)了自己小時(shí)候的經(jīng)歷，always feel sad or nervous about the difficulties in my life，并在父母的鼓勵(lì)下開(kāi)始有了自信，hen my parents told me that where there is a will, there is a way, they also told me that I should be confident。這一段的描寫(xiě)有些籠統(tǒng)，如果能舉一個(gè)具體的實(shí)例會(huì)更好。接下來(lái)作者著重寫(xiě)的是自信對(duì)我們的影響，to be confident means I should believe myself. If I do that, I will become a happy and brave person、I won't be afraid of the difficulties in my life and I'm sure that nothing can beat me and I will win!。這一部分使用的句型比較豐富，如非謂語(yǔ)動(dòng)詞、狀語(yǔ)從句、賓語(yǔ)從句等。

考點(diǎn)：開(kāi)放式作文。