Question

13．時光荏苒，三年的初中生活即將過去．在這三年中，一定有某個你特別難忘的日子．請你以"What a/an             day!"為題，寫一篇短文，描述你印象深刻的一天．空白處可填入 happy，sad，relaxing 等詞．
要求：1．結構清晰，語言準確、內容充實；
2．詞數80左右．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：But I think the Clean-up Day is the most unforgettable of all the things that have happened．但我認為清潔日是所有發生的事情中最難忘的一天．本句是一個由think引導的賓語從句；后面是一個由that引導的定語從句，先行詞是all the things，被all所修飾，故只能用that．
高分句型二：All of us felt very tired but we still felt very happy，because we all gave our own energy to make the school become better and better．我們都感到很累，但我們仍然感到非常高興，因為我們都付出了自己的精力，使學校變得越來越好．這是由because引導的原因狀語從句； better and better越來越好．

解答 What a happy day!
       It's the last term for us to study in our school．Thinking back on the past three years，I have taken part in many activities with my classmates．But I think the Clean-up Day is the most unforgettable of all the things that have happened．（高分句型一）（開篇點題）
　　On the afternoon of a sunny day，all of my classmates took the tools and went to the playground．Some of us swept the floor，some picked the litter up and the others watered the flowers．（具體的活動）
　　At last，the whole school became brighter and cleaner．All of us felt very tired but we still felt very happy，because we all gave our own energy to make the school become better and better．（高分句型二）（活動后的收獲和感想）

點評 （1）句型多樣化，不要I（We）…到底，使人覺得乏味．（2）適當使用一些并列句或主從復合句．（3）進一步描繪人或事物時，適當使用定語從句．（4）適當使用分詞或分詞短語，烘托謂語動詞．（5）偶爾使用一下倒裝句，增加新鮮感．