Question

最近，你們班召開(kāi)了以“我的中國(guó)夢(mèng)”為主題的班會(huì)活動(dòng),每位同學(xué)都暢談了自己對(duì)中國(guó)夢(mèng)的理解。請(qǐng)寫(xiě)一篇日記，記述班會(huì)情況及自己的感受。內(nèi)容要點(diǎn)如下：

1.同學(xué)們談到中國(guó)夢(mèng)紛紛表示大受鼓舞;

2.你談到了自己的夢(mèng)想;

3.如何實(shí)現(xiàn)自己的夢(mèng)想。

要求:(1)詞數(shù)100字左右;

(2)在答題卡上作答。

April 8 Monday Fine

Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My Chinese Dream. Inspired by President Xi’s Chinese Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of the Chinese Dream. We all believe that this dream will come true in the future. I also talked about my own dream. I have always wanted to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job. Doctors can also help people to live a better life with their professional knowledge .To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.

 

Answer 1

【答案】

 

One possible version:

April 8 Monday Fine

Recently we had a class meeting on the topic of My Chinese Dream. Inspired by President Xi’s Chinese Dream, everyone talked enthusiastically about his understanding of the Chinese Dream. We all believe that this dream will come true in the future. I also talked about my own dream. I have always wanted to be a doctor. Not only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job. Doctors can also help people to live a better life with their professional knowledge .To realize my dream, I must try to work hard from now on. I must learn as much as I can so that I can get into a good medical college, where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor. Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.

【解析】

試題分析：本篇書(shū)面表達(dá)是一篇日記。在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要注意使用第一人稱(chēng)。日記是記敘已經(jīng)發(fā)生過(guò)的事情，要用一般過(guò)去時(shí)，此篇文章內(nèi)容是暢談夢(mèng)想，所以也會(huì)使用一般現(xiàn)在時(shí)或一般將來(lái)時(shí)來(lái)表述現(xiàn)在的感受或者未來(lái)的行動(dòng)。此外，分析要點(diǎn)可知文章內(nèi)容要涉及三個(gè)方面，即同學(xué)們的感受、自己的夢(mèng)想和自己的打算，在寫(xiě)作時(shí)要恰當(dāng)使用連接詞把這三個(gè)方面有機(jī)聯(lián)系起來(lái)。而且寫(xiě)作時(shí)還應(yīng)注意細(xì)節(jié)上的補(bǔ)充以豐富文章內(nèi)容，使行文連貫順暢。

【亮點(diǎn)說(shuō)明】文章符合日記文體的要求，而且要點(diǎn)全面，結(jié)構(gòu)緊湊。文中使用了多種表達(dá)方式，如非謂語(yǔ)短語(yǔ)Inspired by President Xi’s Chinese Dream,不定式短語(yǔ)To realize my dream,狀語(yǔ)從句so that I can get into a good medical college和定語(yǔ)從句where I can prepare myself adequately for the job of a doctor.等，使文章句式豐富，亮點(diǎn)紛呈。兩個(gè)倒裝句N(xiāo)ot only can doctors save people’s lives but also they are doing a respectable job.和Only in this way can I accomplish my goal.的使用不但豐富了句式，同時(shí)也使文章上下銜接更為緊湊。此外，高級(jí)詞匯enthusiastically、 accomplish、 adequately等的出現(xiàn)也提高了作文的檔次。

考點(diǎn)：考查提綱作文。