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2．現(xiàn)在很多學校嚴禁學生上學帶手機，但是仍有許多學生把手機帶到學校．請你結合此現(xiàn)象談談你的看法，并給校報英語專欄投稿．內(nèi)容要點如下：
1．簡述該現(xiàn)象；
2．談談帶手機上學的弊端；
3．闡述你的觀點．
注意：1．詞數(shù)100左右，開頭已給出，不計入總詞數(shù)；
2．可以適當增加細節(jié)，以使行文連貫．
In recent years，many schools have taken tough measures to forbid students to bring their mobile phones to school．However，some students break this rule and some students even play with their mobile phones in class，which makes the teacher frustrated．（高分句型一）
The disadvantages of students bringing mobile phones to school are obvious．On the one hand，mobile phones can distract students'attention．On the other hand，some students may get access to some unhealthy websites，which are bad for their development．（高分句型二）Worse still，some students are likely to compare the brands of thei r mobile phones with their classmates'．
In my opinion，I strongly support banning mobile phones in schools．Only in this way can we devote more energies to our study and achieve our goals．（高分句型三）．

Answer 1

分析 本篇書面表達屬于提綱類作文，根據(jù)提示信息現(xiàn)在很多學校嚴禁學生上學帶手機，但是仍有許多學生把手機帶到學校．請你結合此現(xiàn)象談談你的看法，并給校報英語專欄投稿，寫作時注意以下幾點：1、仔細閱讀有關提示，弄清試題提供的所有信息，要點包括：簡述該現(xiàn)象；談談帶手機上學的弊端；闡述你的觀點．2、提綱是文章的總體框架，要在提綱的范圍內(nèi)進行分析、構思和想象．要依據(jù)提示情景或詞語，按照一定邏輯關系來寫．本文寫作時可以按照要點所給的順序寫．3、根據(jù)要表達的內(nèi)容確定句子的時態(tài)、語態(tài)．4．注意使用高級詞匯和句式，以增加文章的亮點．
【亮點說明】本文結構緊湊，層次分明，而且使用了多種表達：take tough measures采取強硬措施；However然而；On the one hand一方面；On the other hand另一方面；Worse still更糟的是；In my opinion以我的觀點看
However，some students break this rule and some students even play with their mobile phones in class，which makes the teacher frustrated．（高分句型一）
On the other hand，some students may get access to some unhealthy websites，which are bad for their development．（高分句型二）
Only in this way can we devote more energies to our study and achieve our goals．（高分句型三）

解答 In recent years，many students have taken tough measures to forbid students to bring their mobile phones to school．However，some students break this rule and some students even play with their mobile phones in class，which makes the teacher frustrated．（高分句型一）
      The disadvantages of students bringing mobile phones to school are obvious．On the one hand，mobile phones can distract students'attention．On the other hand，some students may get access to some unhealthy websites，which are bad for their development．（高分句型二）Worse still，some students are likely to compare the brands of thei r mobile phones with their classmates'．
      In my opinion，I strongly support banning mobile phones in schools．Only in this way can we devote more energies to our study and achieve our goals．（高分句型三）

點評 英語寫作是一項主觀性較強的測試題．它不僅考查學生的寫作基礎而且還考查學生在寫作過程中綜合運用語言的能力．在撰寫時要注意主謂語一致，時態(tài)呼應，用詞貼切等．要提高英語寫作水平，需要兩方面的訓練：一是語言基礎方面的訓練，要有扎實的造句、翻譯等基本功，即用詞法、句法等知識造出正確無誤的句子；二是寫作知識和能力 方面的訓練以掌握寫作方面的基本方法和技巧．