Question

基礎寫作 (滿分15分)
以下是“廣州市文物保護研討會”的有關信息:
時間: 2011年12月25日.
地點: 廣東省博物館
主辦單位: 廣州市文化局
與會人員: 歷史學家, 文物專家, 廣州市政府有關負責人等.
會議內容: 廣州市的哪些文物應該要保護以及如何保護這些文物.
會議成果: 1) 確定了一系列需要保護的文物;
2) 明確了政府的職責以及非政府組織的職責;
與會者特別建議: 政府應該號召全民參與到保護文物的行動中來。
*研討會 conference    *主辦 sponsor  *廣州市文化局 Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs   *專家 expert    *非政府組織 non-governmental organization
[寫作內容]
請寫一篇有關 “廣州市文物保護研討會”的通訊稿, 內容包括: 舉辦時間、地點、主辦單位、與會人員、會議內容以及會議成果和特別建議。
[寫作要求]
只能用5個句子表達全部內容
[評分標準]
句子結構準確，信息內容完整，篇章連貫

Answer 1

A conference on the protection of the cultural relics in Guangzhou was held in Guangdong Museum on December 25^th 2011. This conference was sponsored by Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs and present at the conference were historians, experts in cultural relics and the leaders concerned from the Guangzhou Government. This conference aimed to decide which cultural relics in Guangzhou should be protected and how to protect them. With all the efforts of the participants, the conference has not only identified a series of cultural relics which need to be protected but also has made clear the role of the government and that of the non-governmental organizations. In addition, the participants of the conference suggest that the government should get all citizens involved in the protection of the cultural relics.

解析寫作前首先要看清楚要求，題目要求寫“廣州市文物保護研討會”的通訊稿,只能寫五句話，而且要包括內容包括: 舉辦時間、地點、主辦單位、與會人員、會議內容以及會議成果和特別建議。在構建文章時要注意信息的整合，如：時間地點、主辦單位與會人員可以在一句話中進行交代。例如范文中第一句A conference on the protection of the cultural relics in Guangzhou was held in Guangdong Museum on December 25^th 2011.就把時間地址巧妙地柔和在了一起，但要注意先交代地點，再交代時間，第二句話This conference was sponsored by Guangzhou Bureau of Cultural Affairs and present at the conference were historians, experts in cultural relics and the leaders concerned from the Guangzhou Government.里面既有主辦單位，又有與會人員，而且用了倒裝句。在表示目的的句子中文章用了aimed to詞組表達了此意。第四句話是個長句：With all the efforts of the participants, the conference has not only identified a series of cultural relics which need to be protected but also has made clear the role of the government and that of the non-governmental organizations，用了not only…but also…連接了兩個并列部分，信息量很大，而且這里that的用法也很好，指代前面的role. 最后的建議中，用了In addition, the participants of the conference suggest that the government should get all citizens involved in the protection of the cultural relics.其中的get…involved in…/in the protection of都是很常見的詞組，恰如其分的表達了句意。