Question

如今手機在中學生當中使用越來越普遍，同學就“校園內是否可以使用手機”進行討論同學們對此各抒己見. 請你給編輯寫一封信，反映討論情況并談談你自己的觀點。

贊同	不贊同	你的觀點
1. 方便聯系	1．學校有公用電話	…
2. 突發事故，可求助	2．玩游戲 ，影響學習
3. 課余可放松自己	3. 浪費時間，金錢

注意：1. 開頭部分已給出，不計入總詞數；2可適當增加細節和連接詞，使文章通順連貫3.詞數：100左右
Dear Editor,
Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students.                                                                  
                                                                               
                                                                               
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Yours truly,
Wang Lin

Answer 1

Dear Editor,
Nowadays mobile phones are becoming more and more popular among the middle school students My schoolmates have different opinions. Some think it is convenient to get in touch with others with the cell-phone, which also makes you feel safe especially in time of trouble. Besides, We can relax ourselves by playing them when we’re tired of our studies.
While others think differently. First, the cell-phone in not a must in school, as there are some IC phones there, making it easy to call others. Second, many students often play e -games and send e-massages with their cell-phones, even in class, which will surely have bad effects on their study. Worse is to come, it will result in a great waste of time and money.
In my opinion, the cell-phone is a useful tool in our daily life. But it doesn't mean we can use freely in school. (it’s not wrong to follow the fashion, but the most important thing is how to use the mobile phone in a right way.)
Yours truly,
Wang Lin

解析試題分析：考查提綱類作文。本文屬于提綱里作文中常見的給材料作文。話題是校園內是否可以使用手機，文章的要點都已經以表格形式給出，考生只需要做適當的串聯，用合適的連接詞把這些分開的要點連接詞起來如first,second， Worse is to come,等。本文中可以使用倒裝句，把表示地點的介詞短語提起，后面使用全部倒裝。同時變化使用不同的句式，讓文章更富有變化，提升文章的檔次。如Some think it is convenient to get in touch with others with the cell-phone, which also makes you feel safe especially in time of trouble.這句話里面有非限制性定語從句，the cell-phone in not a must in school, as there are some IC phones there, making it easy to call others這句話是現在分詞做結果狀語。
考點：考查提綱類短文的寫作。
點評：對于提綱類短文最重要的是不要遺漏要點，所有的要點要全面覆蓋，在寫作的時候要使用合適的連接詞和高級句型讓文章更流暢更有層次。