Question

11．假如你是初三學生李華，近日你發現校園里學生吃零食現象非常嚴重．根據圖表信息，請你以"校園拒絕零食"為主題，寫一封倡議書．

寫作要求：
1．根據圖表信息進行寫作，可適當發揮，以使行文連貫；
 2．詞數80-100．文章開頭和結尾已給出，不計入總詞數；
3．文中不得出現與考生本人相關的真實姓名、校名和地名等信息．
參考詞匯：零食 snacks           包裝袋 wrappers

Dear students，
Recently，a lot of students eat snacks at school．It has caused serious problems．Some students are spending much money on snacks．Eating snacks is a waste of money．It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．In addition，most snacks have too much fat and sugar．They are unhealthy food．Eating too much may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw wrappers everywhere．As middle school students，we shouldn't eat snacks any more．
Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．
Yours sincerely，Li Hua．

Answer 1

分析 這是一篇提綱作文．內容是以"校園拒絕零食"為主題，寫一封倡議書．時態主要為一般現在時．人稱主要為第三人稱．
寫作思路：考生需要首先審清主題，圍繞主題展開作文．
其次考生可從以下幾個方面展開作文，即本文的寫作要點：
1零食的危害：污染環境、浪費錢、無益健康；
2我們應該采取的行動
常用到的重點短語：
spend+金錢+on sth  花錢做某事
a waste of 浪費
get rid of 放棄
in addition 另外
too much  太多
what's worse 糟糕的是
【高分句型】
1．Eating snacks is a waste of money．    
動名詞短語做主語，謂語動詞用單數is．
2．It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．
it是形式主語，that從句是真正主語．
3．Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．       
let's do sth 讓我們做某事．提出建議．

解答 Dear students，
Recently，a lot of students eat snacks at school．It has caused serious problems．Some students are spending much money on snacks．Eating snacks is a waste of money．【高分句型】It's also a bad habit that we should get rid of．【高分句型】In addition，most snacks have too much fat and sugar．They are unhealthy food．Eating too much may lead to fatness and illness．What is worse，some students throw wrappers everywhere．（零食的危害）As middle school students，we shouldn't eat snacks any more．
Dear students，let's form good eating habits and say no to snacks．【高分句型】（我們應該采取的行動）
Yours sincerely，
Li Hua

點評 本題要求以中學生李華的名義，以"校園拒絕零食"為主題，寫一封倡議書．根據圖表提示，短文應從吃零食的危害：污染環境、浪費錢、無益健康；我們應該采取的行動等等方面展開寫作．短文要用一般現在時態及帶有情態動詞的句子，用第一稱形式進行表達．作為一封倡議書，要注意思想積極健康，語言精煉簡捷．短文用dear稱呼學生，配合情態動詞should，語言親切，感染力強．短文首先指出了學校許多學生吃零食的現象，并總體指出其造成了嚴重的問題．然后從浪費錢、無益健康、污染環境幾方面講述吃零食的危害．層次清楚．其中用了動名詞短語作主語、主語從句等等語法結構，具體生動；最后倡議大家：不再吃零食，拒絕零食．主旨鮮明，主題突出．