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要求：內容切題、語句通順、意思連貫、字跡清楚．
（注意：短文中不得出現考生的姓名、校名及其它相關信息，否則不予評分．）
I used tobe a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me．Now I'd like to say I've changed a lot．In fact，all is because of my mother'sdiaries．One day I saw my mother'sdiary book by accident while I was looking for my notebook．I was curious and began to read my mother's diaries．In her diaries，she showedher deep love for me．She a becauseof lso expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes．She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy．I couldn't help crying after reading my mother's diaries．Since that day，I havechanged a lot．I work hard and share some housework．I also try to understand my mother's feelings．．

Answer 1

分析 高分句型一：
I①used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to②be angry with me．我曾經是一個淘氣的男孩，我的母親曾經對我生氣．
①used to be或used to do sth指過去常常怎么樣或做某事
②be angry with sb對某人生氣
高分句型二：
I ①couldn't help crying②after reading my mother's diaries．在閱讀了我母親的日記后，我忍不住哭了起來．
①can't help doing sth情不自禁做某事
②after引導的時間狀語從句，后跟動名詞

解答 I used to be a naughty boy and my mother used to be angry with me．【高分句型一】Now I'd like to say I've changed a lot．【前后的變化對比】In fact，all is because of my mother'sdiaries．One day I saw my mother'sdiary book by accident while I was looking for my notebook．I was curious and began to read my mother's diaries．In her diaries，she showedher deep love for me．She a becauseof lso expressed her disappointment when I made mistakes．She said she loved me so much and she believed I could be a good boy．I couldn't help crying after reading my mother's diaries．【高分句型二】Since that day，I have changed a lot．I work hard and share some housework．I also try to understand my mother's feelings．【具體講述一件事情說明變化的原因】

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