Question

寫一篇請求加入觀鳥協會的申請（80字左右）

你叫李明，陽光中學八年級學生

最喜愛的科目是生物，對各種鳥類植物感興趣

想成為觀鳥協會的一員，了解更多鳥類知識

做點事保護鳥類，星期六下午3-5點可以參加活動

Dear Chairperson

I would like to join the Birdwatching Society.

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I will be very happy if I can become a member of the Birdwatching Society. My telephone number is 12345678910.

 

Answer 1

Dear Chairperson ,

I would like to join the Birdwatching Society.

First, I’m a 15-year-old student in Grade 8 at Sunshine secondary school. My name is Li Ming. Second, my favourite subject is biologist and I’m very interested in all kinds of birds and plants. I’m also an animal lover, so I love birds and nature very much. Next, I want to join the Birdwatching Society to learn more knowledge about birds. Finally, I think it is very important for me to do something to protect birds. I can take part in the activities from three to five o’clock on every Sunday afternoon.

I will be very happy if I can become a member of the Birdwatching Society. My telephone number is 12345678910.

Yours sincerely,

Liming

【解析】

試題分析：這是一篇提綱作文。本文要求按照所給的提示內容完成這篇申請書信，我們要用恰當的語言把所列舉的內容準確地表達出來。寫作中要包含自己的基本信息、興趣愛好、入會的目的和業余時間等四個方面進行陳述，表達出自己想入會的迫切心情等。根據材料內容可知本文主要是一般現在時態，人稱主要是第一人稱，注意并列連詞的使用及主謂一致問題。寫作中注意上下文的過度，符合邏輯關系。

【亮點說明】這篇短文簡明、扼要地闡明了自己的入會申請，并包含了文中所要求的全部信息。其中使用了一些固定句式和短語，包含過渡語的準確使用為文章增色不少.如take part in，I’m very interested in all kinds of birds and plants，it is very important for me to do something to protect birds.，First, Second, Next, Finally,學習中再注意總結,牢記一些固定句式及短語,寫作時就可以適當引用,使文章的表達更有邏輯性,更富有條理。

考點：提綱作文。